For the Supporting ST, please, visit the following link to speak about Rami’s organization: SSTS: https://www.imancentral.org/about/chicago/
Arij BEN YAZID says: Kindness and good deeds have more power than we think. In fact, it has the power to change the world and even our perspectives. That is why almost every religion and culture values and rewards the performance of good deeds. If you always think about all the good deeds you do, you might realize that you feel a strange kind of happiness that you find hard to describe. But the bad deeds you do also have to be thought about, because you will realize that you feel ashamed and disgraced. And if if all people think this way they will always do good deeds so that when ever they think about their good deeds they will feel that happiness that is so great to feel.
MOHAMMED AMRI says: It is undeniable that good deeds can change people perspective to a certain group of people.In fact, It has the power to change the world and make it one nation.And that what the muslim are trying to achieve by doing good deeds to show the world the real islam that the prophet teached us.For instance , IMAN association is one of them.This organization try to help poors and homles just to prove to the world the origines of the ISLAM.And as the verses sais: (They ask thee what they should spend (In charity). Say: Whatever ye spend that is good, is for parents and kindred and orphans and those in want and for wayfarers. And whatever ye do that is good, -(Allah) knoweth it well). (Al-Baqara, Chapter #2, Verse #215).In brief Good deeds are the only thing that can create a united world without narcissism and antipathy.
Dear Med Amri,
Good essay but please consider the following remarks:
1- Long Topic sentence. I think you were absent when we discussed the essay organization.
2- The Supporting TS: it is not very strong. A long sentence like : “And that what the muslim are trying to achieve by doing good deeds to show the world the real islam that the prophet teached us.”
Thank you. Best luck.
Ranya says: Good deeds change our perspectives. In fact, good deeds can completely change the point of view of a person, to a complete other point of view and prove them wrong.To illustrate, social media is often misleading, it sometimes sheds the lights on some points which makes us view some issues from a single way only. Which could be very negative on a person or a group of people. That’s why we always see so many racist or islamophobic comments everywhere. Social media is just an example of how people view things in general. But doing good deeds is a way to change those ideas, and hopefully reveal to people the truth and take away all the “clichés” about us. Apart from worldwide issues, good deeds could help us on a smaller scale. For example, let’s imagine you are a muslim living next to an islamophobic neighbor. Always giving you the devil eye and glowering at you. But one day, you end up offering your help while you see him struggling at something. That would make him trust you more, and even regret the way he was acting towards you. All in all, as the quote goes:”You don’t have to be a millionnaire to win someone’s heart, one good deed could change people’s perception about you “
Thank you Ranya,
Great TS. Please, keep in mind “which” is a relative pronoun. It should connect 2 sentences. It should not be in the beginning of sentence. “. Which could be very negative on a person or a group of people.”
A concluding sentence: Please, no quote in the CS. A quote is important in the conclusion, not CS.
Chaimae Mektel says: Good deeds is the action of doing things to help others or to make them happy. In point of fact, this action can change many things, especially people’s perspectives. But how?
Well, we all know that most of people today keep thinking that Muslims are terrorists, but actually we’re not and we should delete this bad idea by acting good and doing things that help others and raise a smile on there face, such as: “colaborating and working with non-Muslims, and also with keeping a good example or image of co-operation and tolerance between different cultures and faiths”. In addition to that, as someone said: ” Let your good deeds be like a rain. Drope a little every where”.
In brief, do good deeds for inttention not for attention.
PLease, Chaymae: a TS is short. After TS, just elaborate in 1 or 2 sentences. Then, please give one argument or two. Then, a concluding sentence. The CS is a TP in different vocabulary. That’s it. SIMPLE.
Pease, check the following link to see how we write a paragraph: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLSfugd4lhjolvhU2axDOLnzRSiWccxsNoGHT281bVAuIffOb-w/viewform
Rime El Badaoui says: I think your paragraph was pretty well elaborated, just in line 4, I think it’s “their” instead of “there”, and also as teacher already said the TS should be short and also I don’t think having a question is a good idea because it makes your paragraph like if you were using the spoken english( it’s like you are speaking not writing). But overall it was great.
Lina Oumharch :) says: ” A good deed brightens a dark world”. With reference to the quote, i conclude that doing good deeds can have a huge influence on others and can even change their perspectives about something. As humans, everyone of us can misjudge things and people, but good deeds are the only acts that can change those misguides. Let’s take Islam as an example, as Muslims, our religion is misjudged by a lot of people. Basing on the terrorist acts made on the behalf of Islam, those latter believe that our religion is a terrorism and war religion, consequently, they hate Muslims and don’t respect them. However, when Muslims do good deeds and help others, they are showing the real image of Islam. So here, good deeds can change people’s perspectives about religions. In addition to this, good deeds shows people’s intentions, if they are honest or not , in other words a honest person always help others without showing it and without waiting a versus, while other people help in order to become famous. All in all, every human being likes to be helped and loved, helping a person is the best way to change his wrong perspectives.
Please, where is a TS and Where is the CS. I can’t find them despite the very good English.
Please go to: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLSfugd4lhjolvhU2axDOLnzRSiWccxsNoGHT281bVAuIffOb-w/viewform
The link shows how we write a paragraph. I see yours is very similar to a public speaking. Also, be careful to the spelling of “I”. I don’t think you are texting. Equally important, in other words is used to say something differently. Please, it should come after full stop.
In brief, very good English, but more work needed on organization. I know you can do it very soon.
omnia says: Excellent work just few mistakes like/:
(every one ); (show: the verb shows does not appear to agree with the plural subject deeds); (in other word: add comma); helps ; (waiting: waiting for ….) ; (honest: an honest).
keep going.
Saddik Nizar says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, they have the power to change the person’s vision about humanity. In other words, good acts can win people’s heart by gaining their trust. Since, we belong to Islam; we must give to our religion a good image to inspire others, by helping and sharing. The best example is the Muslims NGOs who are working together with non-Muslims; they are a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. In addition to that, I see that the only way to remove the idea of terrorism is the good deeds, in order to build up the trust. But I believe, one day, people will be aware of the real message of Islam. To conclude, good manners and ethics are a must and a way that leads to build a good society.
Thanks a lot dear Nezar. NO comment. Very good TS, very good CS and good TS and SSTS.
The problem is: punctuation. Please, when you finish a sentence , use a full stop.
chaimae Aourchan says: Good deeds can definitely change people’s perspectives .That is to say, the world needs more do_ gooders to help misjudged and alienated people coming from different backgrounds ,in order to regain their true image and respect .A good example of that is Rami NASHASHIBI , a Muslim that runs an organization named I.M.A.N(Inner-City Muslim Action Network ),that is located in Chicago U.S . This organization provides fresh food, health care , housing ,and even job opportunities for those in need . It also includes art and culture crafts ,for a spiritual,artistic , and cultural connections in the community . He aims for reforming and recreating a better life for marginalized people . This discriminated section of community is mainly composed of Muslims,Jews ,Black,Latinos ,and all sorts of excluded ethnicities in the U.S . Rami’s organization welcomes and reintegrates marginalized people, for them to surface in the community and become a crucial part of it .Rami is being ahead of the curve by overcoming hatered and haters, along with spreading love and compassion , in order to refashion a greater world composed of a loving family .Receiving and noticing this kind of help from a Muslim is certainly recreating a new image for Muslims , therefore bridging the cultural gaps . Muslims will no longer be perceived as violent extremists, but as merciful human beings . The stereotypes ,false representations , and misconceptions diminish because of people like Rami NASHASHIBI . For this reason , more humanitarians are needed in our world for the sake of restoring the true image of people with different backgrounds and ethnicities .
Thank you for the wonderful paragraph. Nevertheless, few tips to consider:
1- “.That is to say,” It is better to repalce it by: In fact, actually, indeed… These are used to elaborate an idea, not to explain them.
2- backgrounds ,in order to regain : Please, no punctuation when the linking word is in the middle of a sentence.
Nada Lembarki says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In fact, when doing the good for your society, you upgrade it to the better and show your good side to your surrounding which will have a positive impact on the society. We can mention as an example Rami, a muslim man who lives in USA, has an organization in which he helps needy people, such as finding jobs for them, giving them food, and all what they need. To deduce, try to do what’s best for your community, deeds that will make a change on it and make you be a good example to others.
Thank you for your beautiful short essay.
Please, consider the following mistakes:
1- good side to your surrounding which will have a positive impact on the society: You need comma before which because the sentence after which is an additional information. Example: I live in Berkane, which is a beautiful city. ( which is a beautiful city is an addition)
2- We can mention as an example Rami, …: Correction: Rami, for example,…
3- organization in which he helps needy people: Correction: organization which helps…: They train them for better jobs, ….
4- To deduce. Correction: to conclude.
Thank you.
Med Elkharras says: Good deeds change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, sharing, helping and well treating people lead to lift the curtain on some religions, which are considered as terorists. Moreover, the actions of each one could abuse trust or win people’s heart. The best example is IMAN Chicago; it is an organization which have built the cooperation and tolerance between different faith and cultures. First of all, they consider healthcare as one of the important pillars. Indeed, they provide comprehensive, accessible and culturally-competent health care to its diverse patient population. As well as they care about art & culture, It has been added to IMAN’s work since its inception. In brief, the volunteering work shift people’s attitude.
Thank you for your very good effort. Please can you consider the following mistakes:
1- lead to lift : lead to lifting.
Bravo
Rime El Badaoui says: I think your paragraph was well structered and everything was great, just a simple note I think it’s just a typing mistake, in line 2, it’s “terrorists” with double r
Karam LEBRAZI says: Good deeds can absolutly change peolple’s perspectives. In fact, it gives a powerful message to every religion to make a huge change from bad to best. In addition to this, when you do a good deed you are heplping others, and you feel more stronger in your heart and feelings. Moreover, IMAN is an organization that helps needy people in health, food, housing, etc. To conclude, don’t do good, do the best.
Karam LEBRAZI says: Good deeds can absolutly change peolple’s perspectives. In fact, it gives a powerful message to every religion to make a huge change from bad to best. In addition to this, when you do a good deed you are heplping others, and you feel more stronger in your heart and feelings. Moreover, IMAN is an organization that helps needy people in health, food, housing, etc. To add, according to “Wikipedia”, IMAN sees understanding Islam as part of a larger process to empower individuals and communities to work for the betterment of humanity. To conclude, don’t do good, do the best. (Update)
Thank you for your lovely essay. Very few mistakes to consider:
1- from bad to best: from bad to good
2- more stronger: much stronger
3- helps needy people in health, food, housing: helps needy people in different sectors: health,…
Bravo Karam
Good deeds can change people’s life . In fact , people must change they point of view . In other words , when you help people and gain they trust . Besides , we are muslims and we must help other people despite their different religion . For example , the initiative that we see in the video in class . A group of peolple feed the needy people despite their different religions and roots . The images of Muslim NGOs working together with non-Muslims provide good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures . And also the organization that RAMI create has a lot of programs as involving people who don’t have jobs and let them work . The Housing Program incorporates life skills classes, behavioral health services, leadership development, artistic expression, learning trips to various cultural, political and educational institutions across the country, learning exchanges between our sister sites in Chicago, Atlanta, and Baltimore. If we work together , we will build a better world where we live in peace and love . All in all , helping other people , let us to win their heart and build up trust between us .
Good deeds can change people’s life . In fact , people must change they point of view . In other words , when you help people and gain they trust . Besides , we are muslims and we must help other people despite their different religion . For example , the initiative that we see in the video in class . A group of peolple feed the needy despite their different religions and roots . The images of Muslim NGOs working together with non-Muslims provide good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures . And also the organization that RAMI create has a lot of programs as involving people who don’t have jobs and let them work . The Housing Program incorporates life skills classes, behavioral health services, leadership development, artistic expression, learning trips to various cultural, political and educational institutions across the country, learning exchanges between our sister sites in Chicago, Atlanta, and Baltimore. If we work together , we will build a better world where we live in place based on peace and love . All in all , helping other people , let us to win their heart and build up trust between us . (Update)
Bravo leader, Good work. But few remarks:
1- people must change they point of view: their view
2- people must change they point of view . In other words , when you help people and gain they trust . Besides , all this sentence should be dropped. It does not make any sense.
3- let us to win their heart: let us win
Bravo
lina El Mazzouji says: Good deeds shine like stars in the night time. In fact, there are many benefits to doing good deeds, some of these benefits may be very obvious to you, while you may not have considered some of the others for example changing people’s perspectives. According to some researches, people who preform good deeds develop a reputation as a good moral person, they also radiate “prosocial behaviour”, it is that their kindness propagates across their social network, which motivates them to carry on their positive action and improves the quality of their social interactions. Social media impacts our lives, so, if someone posts himself helping others, that doesn’t mean he is showing off his acts, he wants to change people’s perspectives form a bad one to a good one, he wants to motivate people to do something helpful for their society. For example, IMAN association, it was found by Rami Nashashibi , a muslim living in Chicago, it helps people from different ages, nationalities, races and religions… he invites people to donate to help others, he changes people’s perspectives by doing good deeds that affect them to do better for our world and change it to the best. In conclusion, no good deed goes unpunished.
Thank you Lina, very good work.
Some mistakes to consider:
1- some of these benefits may be very obvious to you, while you may not have considered some of the others for example changing people’s perspectives: It is a long sentence but not very clear. You can say it in different way, more concisely.
2- no good deed goes unpunished.: I think you want to say goes unrewarded. When you do good things, you get rewarded.
Yasmine halfi says: Good deeds change our perspectives. As a matter of fact, Islam is a religion of peace, but its image has been changed because of stereotypes and the misbehavior of some. Despite these misjudgments, lots of Muslims all over the globe try their best to clear up this image. Islam has always been known for co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures, in order to correct those cliché; Muslims have been proving their worth by following one of the pillars of their religion, which consists in Almsgiving. And I believe that by doing good deeds, people’s perspectives can definitely change and it is a great way to change those false prejudgments, and hopefully reveal to people the truth and take away all the stereotypes about us and our religion. A good example of that is Rami NASHASHIBI, a Muslim that runs an organization named I.M.A.N, which stands for; (Inner-City Muslim Action Network), located in Chicago U.S. This organization provides fresh food, health care, housing, and even job opportunities for those in need, and is one of the best examples we could find in this field to show our kindness through good deeds. All in all, do good deeds for intention not for attention, and you will be rewarded sooner or later.
Excellent essay: very good organization, very good use of the vocabulary.
Please, consider the following very few mistakes:
1- its image has been changed because of stereotypes and the misbehavior of some: has changed or has been changing.
2- One more thing: you have a lot of commas in stead of full stop.
In brief, very good work.
Aymane Blfadil says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact , it changes the world and makes it one community build trust , respect and understanding across all cultures. To manifest , the muslims beleive that with good deeds and kindness they will win people’s heart and gain trust and that has one reason it’s hight there dignity ; to clarify , people judge muslims at first sight and think that they are terrorists , so muslims try to do their best to show them the real image of a islam . And one of this way is the The collaborative thinking , as an exemple we have IMAN Chicago that models an integrative approach that employs holistic interventions to address a spectrum of structural and systemic injustices impeding a dignified quality of life for people in marginalized communities , for this reason she do a lot have activities to reach this goal such us( health center _ Organizing and advocacy _ arts and culture _ Green rEntry).
All in all, te good deeds have the power to change the world and even our perspectives.
Aymane Blfadil says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact , it changes the world and makes it one community build trust , respect and understanding across all cultures. To manifest , the muslims beleive that with good deeds and kindness they will win people’s heart and gain trust and that has one reason it’s hight there dignity ; to clarify , people judge muslims at first sight and think that they are terrorists , so muslims try to do their best to show them the real image of islam . And one of this way is the collaborative thinking , as an exemple we have the organization of IMAN located in Chicago that models an integrative approach that employs holistic interventions to address a spectrum of structural and systemic injustices impeding a dignified quality of life for people in marginalized communities , for this reason she do a lot have activities to reach this goal such us( health center _ Organizing and advocacy _ arts and culture _ Green rEntry).
All in all, te good deeds have the power to change the world and even our perspectives
Bravo Ayman,
Very good work. Please, consider the following mistakes:
1- has one reason it’s hight there dignity: This sentence is not clear.
2- And one of this way: it is better not to start a sentence with “And”.
3- Please, the concluding sentence should be in the same line of the paragraph. It is not a conclusion.
Bravo
Douae says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives on Islam. In point of fact, when we perform good deeds and help the needy the receivers of that good deed or random act of kindness have not only gotten some help but also received the message that they are important and worth helping. These good deeds warm their hearts and even make them change the way they were thinking of us. Besides that will contribute in bridging the cultural gaps between people. In addition to that when we see Muslims working with non-Muslims in an NGO or an association we prove that we are not perpetrators of violence and disruption, and we provide a good example of tolerance between the different cultures. IMAN is an association in Chicago, its founder is a Muslim man “Rami”. Actually thanks to the great help that this association offers the afro-americans and Muslims are living in peace. The afro-americans could believe that Islam is not terrorism religion because IMAN created host of projects for their needs such as creating shops with lower prices and building free health care clinic. To conclude doing good things can change people’s believes.
Bravo Douae, very good work. Please, consider the following mistakes:
1- exemple: example
2- for this reason she do a lot have activities to reach this goal such us: This sentence is full of mistakes. Can you say it in a better way.
“Our deeds determine us,as much as we determine our deeds”.With regard to this quote i deduce that a good deed is not only a manner to show that we are kind-hearted but also a way to build a good reputation and clear up people’s misconceptions.For instance,Rami Nashashibi is a Muslim
NGO owner who prefers to express his faith through actions by bending together with non-Muslims to build up trust and bridge the cultural gaps.In fact,doing good deeds for people let them know that they are important, and the assistance we provide helps them get through their lives in a more enjoyable way.Besides,When we donate our time, skills, or money, we are generally doing it to make someone’s life better and delightful.Thus, the world becomes a slightly better and brighter place with each donation.In addition,Being happy and being kind are two things we often strive to be in life,and we do not realize that the two are closely linked.That is to say that showing kindness can bring an untold amounts of happiness both for the receiver and the benefactor,it boosts our self-esteem,self-worth and also win people’s heart.At last nobody loses when it comes to kindness.On top of that,our good deeds may inspire other people including the ones we helped to do the same kind of giving we did or even better,hence,we are a community leaders who influence people to show good deeds and act kindly towards people and making difference to change the sunless society into a glowing one out of simple actions.All in all,the most powerful weapon to improve our selves and correct our society’s misjudgments is to perform good deeds.
Great effort, Merry. Please, consider the following remark:
1- “Our deeds determine us,as much as we determine our deeds”.With regard to this quote i deduce that a good deed is not only a manner to show that we are kind-hearted but also a way to build a good reputation and clear up people’s misconceptions.
I see you have mixed two parts: Topic sentence and Supporting Topic sentence.
why should you do good deeds?
Whether you call it random acts of kindness, paying it forward, or good deeds, they are very powerful. That is why almost every religion and culture values and rewards the performance of good deeds. There are many benefits to doing good deeds. Some of these benefits may be very obvious to you, while you may not have considered some of the others.
Sometimes, good deeds can completly change the point of view of a person or changing the way of thinking and it can also prove them wrong.
I can take social media as an example , sometimes it can make us view some issues and things from a single way only. Which could be kind of negative on someone. Social media is an example of how people see things in general . But doing good deeds is an absolute thing that can change those ideas. a lot of homeless people are thankful right now for being fed , it’s a bless for finding muslims working together with non muslims for giving food ; Because we can find people in America who are not even caring about those homeless people wich is so disrespectful ,so because of all the good things we do hopefully we can reveal the truth.
All in all , we should always do good deeds no matter what people say bad things about us for being muslims or judging us“
As the quote goes :if you do one good deed your reward usually is to be set to do another and harder and better one.”
― C.S. Lewis, The Horse and His Boy ;
Great effort dear Hajar. But please consider the following remark:
1- Organization: Topic sentence, Supporting TS, Supporting of STS. Then, the concluding sentence. Your essay is full of ideas but it lacks organization. You may repeat it in a different way and it will be very interesting.
Ouissale Ben-yadi ;) says: Good deeds change people’s perspectives. In a matter of fact, it can change a stand point to a totally different one. As we all know mainstream media most of the time misleade and misconceive us, it only show us specific things. We can take the example of muslims who face different problems because of plenty of misconceptions, but fortunately they are always trying to clear up those perspectives and show the real image of Islam by doing good deeds individualy like : respecting people, helping them with little things and being kind with them… Or by colaborating with people who have different religions and nations. The best example i can give is the muslim NGO called I.M.A.N (Inner-city muslim action network) who helps needy people by giving them health care, food and even job opportunities. It also welcome marginalized people and help them reintegrate the society and get involved on it. All in all, i believe good deeds should be done as much as possible and as many time as possible .It changes people’s attitudes and make our world a better place. 🙂
Thank you dear Ouissal, beautiful work. But please, consider the following remarks:
1- In a matter of fact, : As a matter of fact
2- few spelling mistakes: misleade,…. The best example i can give is the muslim
In general, it is a very nice paragarph.
BOULOUIZ BRAHIM says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, helping others and trying to see there smile must become our priority, we’re not obliged to help with a big amount but sometimes small gestures can have a big impact on the person’s personality, and let him feel that he has a value and there are others who are trying to help him. Moreover, when we try to help we shouldn’t care about religion, color, nationality… we should see the person as a human who needs our help to progress. Let us take the example of SAMI a muslim living in Chicago, who created an association to help needy people, and to build a strong relation with muslims and afro Americans. What impressed me in this association is that they’re trying to help everyone no mater his religion, color or nationality, and this is the best example we can take in our life “we are humans we must help because one we will need help”. In brief, good deeds can change the world on a fundamental way to the better.
Bravo dear Brahim, great work. Very good organization and very good use of the vocabulary and arguments.
Consider the following mistake: to see there smile must become our priority: their smile.
Everyone need help, when you do good deeds people change automatically.
First, helping good people. Such us, give them food , talk with them and buy some clothes for them especially for winter season it can impact on you definitlly.
Second, donate your blood. Everyday sick peoples are in need to your blood. This little initiative can change a person’s life.
Next, be friendlly. Sometimes the smallest thing can impact on others. You will fin you behavior change by time. It doesent matter how small things makes you feel better.
Some homeless people are so thankful right now for having food , it’s the only thing that they were wishing for.
Muslims are doing a really good job because we can find right now americans that are not caring about homeless people in their own country wich is crazy , so maybe while muslims are doing good deeds , hopefully we can reveal the truth.
All in all, we shoukd always do good deeds no matter what people say ,because us the muslims always do good stuff to make someone happy.
As the quote goes : “how far that little candle throws his beams ! So shines a good deed in a weary world.”
Bravo for your great effort. I see you make a big change. But please, consider for the moment:
1- organization: TS – STS -SSTS -CS. Please, read what your friends wrote. ( see Brahim Boulouiz)
2- Arguments: you need arguments.
I am sure the future essays will be better.
OMAR TSOULI. says: Good deeds change people’s perspectives.In fact, it is a bridge between people from diffrent religions, cultures and mentalities. In otherwords, doing some innitiatives in order to foster and reinforce the relation-ship between people in order to live a peiceful life is not only beneficial but also crutial to coexiste with them. As an example, we saw in a video those guys who showed how mutch kidness and dignity they have by reviving ramadan’s instructions, they are donating food each night to hungry people no matter the origine and the religion that are but as a human being. They will show a great image about their religion and attitude, and that is going to change the overwhelming majority of people’s perspectives. In addition to that, Rami the muslim who wants to his neightberhood the best he is colaborating with people as americans and that is the secret of peice and love. In brief, good deeds switche people’s perspectives.
Thank you dear Omar. You have made a big change. I see the confinement has helped you a lot.
Please, focus on the spelling mistakes: crutial – coexiste – origine…
Khalil Margoum says: Good deeds can thoroughly change people’s perspective. In fact people are more affected and highly impressed by our behaviours towards them . As Muslims , we should commit to clear up the misconception that mainstream media gives to many individuals. They portroy Muslims as perpetrators of violence and disruption. Likewise, Muslims NOGs who are working together with non-Muslims, provide a great example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures . Including, IMAN Community Health Center which is an epitome of Muslim who takes action and does not hesitate to lend a helping hand for others whoever they are. Overall, act of kindness has a huge influence on people’s attitude .
Khalil Margoum says: Good deeds can thoroughly change people’s perspective. In fact people are more affected and highly impressed by our behaviours towards them . As Muslims , we should commit to clear up the misconception that mainstream media gives to many individuals. They portroy Muslims as perpetrators of violence and disruption. Likewise, Muslims NOGs who are working together with non-Muslims, provide a great example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures . Including, IMAN Community Health Center which is an epitome of Muslim who takes action and does not hesitate to lend a helping hand for others whoever they are .Acording to their website they say:”We believe that quality health care is a basic human right. The IMAN CHC manifests this belief with a mission of providing comprehensive, accessible and culturally-competent health care to its diverse patient population”. Overall, act of kindness has a huge influence on people’s attitude .
Nour EL Houda Boujemaoui says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, Muslims nowadays should clear up what mainstream media misapprehend about us because kindness benevolence is the only act that can change those prejudgments . for instance ,the Inner-City Muslim Action Network (IMAN) by Rami Nashashibi, a-forty five-year-old community leader building bridges across racial, religious, and socioeconomic divides to confront the challenges of poverty and disinvestment in urban communities.(macfound.org). According to IMAM, Health care organization offer more than 17 differents services which it can help poor people needing a helping hand . Furthermore, Green ReEntry provides transitional housing ; this field help joblessness people, who lost their jobs etc ……. . This Training Program incorporates life skills classes, leadership development learning exchanges between their sister sites in Chicago, Atlanta, and Baltimore.By there, This organization is one of the best examples we could find in this field to show them respect and humanity through good deeds . in other words,”Good deeds should be done with intention, not for attention.”people should be honest when helping the poor .All in all ,good deeds is the super amazing way to correct people ‘s misguides .
Bravo Nour,
Thank you for your effort: very good organization, very good use of the vocabulary and very good use arguments.
Please, consider the punctuation: kindness benevolence is the only act that can change those prejudgments – kindness and benevolence are the only act that can change those prejudgments
Best regards,
omnia says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. They give rise to correct the misapprehend and the misjudgement. Since we refer to Islam, we must clear up the image of our religion in other’s eyes, by volunteer work and helping each other ….. the best example is I.M.A.N(Inner-City Muslim Action Network ), an organization runs by Rami NASHASHIBI, in Chicago U.S. It provides fresh food, health care, housing. It also incorporates art and culture crafts. it’s a model of co-operation, kindness, and clemency between different beliefs and cultures. in addition to this, The betterment of the world can be accomplished through pure and goodly deeds.
Thank you Omnia. Bravo for your great effort. Many congrats.
Please, consider the concluding sentence.
Rime El Badaoui says: I think your paragraph was okay, there were few mistakes that I hope you will take in consideration:
1. There were many words that were after a point that you didn’t write with capital letter, ex:
-Line 2: The best…
-Line 3: It’s a …(also you should write it is)
-Line 4:In addition to …
2. WE say an organization RUNED by….
But in general it was a very good paragraph
Manal Abbadi says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, Islam (muslims religion) is known for its peace and clemency. Nevertheless, mainstream media give rise to misconception and misguidance to mess up our image. They represent it as a religion of violence and disruption. The new generation of muslims is trying to clear up things by changing their behavior. What stands for: INCLUDING and IMPOSING themselves. Working together no matter the religion provides a good example of
co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures.
Rami Nashashibi is one of the best representations that can be given. He is a muslim community organizer who leads an organization called “ISLAM”. It provides: healthcare, healthy food, housing policy and jobs opportunities to people in need, without any discrimination or racism. To conclude, small acts can be powerful and can change people’s standpoints.
Excellent work. Your progress is very noticeable. Please, don’t forget to state the “________” ( the reference).
Rime El Badaoui says: I t is unquestionable that good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In sooth, we are all attracted to people who are generous and kind. Considering we are Muslims, it will be uncomplicated to give a good impact about Islam since it taught us how to always do good deeds and stay away of bad deeds and evil actions. For instance, Imam, a company created by a Muslim, is a good example of good deeds. Moreover, it does not only concern Muslims but also people from different backgrounds, religions… As a result, people become aware of what really Muslims are and how much of generous things they do. By this, many mainstream media will start spreading information that will show a good image of Islam and will clear up the misapprehension and the misjudgment. All in all, the acts of kindness and the big-heart are the key to have a well-structured society and kind-hearted people.
Thank you leader,
Wonderful work: very good organization, arguments…
Few mistakes: media will start spreading information
I know it is unintentional mistake.
Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, every time you do a good deed you shine the light a little further into the dark and when you’re gone that light is going to keep shining on pushing the shadows back. In other words, Islam is the religion of peace and justice . unfortunately , the mainstream media cause misjudgment and misconception to destroy the image of Islam and Muslims . Nowadays ,Muslims are trying to clear up those misjudgment by doing good deeds and the best example is Iman .it is an association which bridge the cultural gaps. Rami Nashashibi is the co founder of this association and a community leader building bridges across racial, religious, and socioeconomic divides to confront the challenges of poverty and disinvestment in urban communities. With reference to Iman “We believe that quality health care is a basic human right. The IMAN Community Health Center manifests this belief with a mission of providing comprehensive, accessible and culturally-competent health care to its diverse patient population.” So muslims should be open-minded and they have to exclude themselves because we’re Muslims this does not mean that we’re terrorist holding a bomb, we’re civilized.
Finally, “it makes many good deeds to build a good reputation, and only one bad one to lose it” Benjamin Franklin.
Very good essay lamyae. It is one of the greatest essays. Few things to consider:
1- Please, the concluding sentence is not a conclusion. I see keep the arguments for the STS. The CS is just a repetition of a topic sentence.
Ayyoub bouazizi says: Good deeds can change people’s perspective. In point of fact, good deeds can correct and clear up the misjudgement and the misconception from those who have a bad vision about Islam. To clarify,the social media sheds the lights on some spots that lead to a path full of issues. For example, let’s take a look at IMAN ,this network helps other people regardless of their religions (Muslims, Christians, Jews,Atheists…).This organization makes the world unite as one through different methods like arts and culture, the health center, the green reEntry and organizing & advocacy. Concisely, even if you are a muslim, positive and valuable deeds will change people’s mindset.
Very good Ayoub. Your essay is just wonderful. Please, consider especially the concluding sentence. it is missing.Also, you should add the reference of your argument.
ghayta houari says: Good deeds once and all change people’s
perspectives. Indeed, Islam is based on giving examples of the prophete’s acts, in that way people are influenced by a lot of samples of good deeds exciting in the qoran. In addition to that the image of Muslim NGO’s working together with non-muslims provide an instance of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. All in all as a proverb goes “Do not be wise in words – be wise in deeds”.
Ghayta, this is a very good essay. It is much better than the others. Please, one mistake to consider: The proverb you have used should be an argument to support your TS. Please, you need a concluding sentence. The CS is just a repetition of the TS, in different vocabulary
Nohayla Hajjout says: It is beyond all shadow of doubt that good deeds can change people’s wrong perspectives. Indeed, Muslims should clear up the erroneous sight that the broadcasting have shown about Islam. This, they have to create new relationships with other people from all over the globe, co operate with them, so that they can disrupt their misjudgements and misapprehension. It is true that we are Muslims; nonetheless, that doesn’t convey that we should despise people from other religions, The following verse is the best evidence of the foregoing ” we made you tribes to get know each other”. You don’t need to look much further than the Quran for proof that Islam is a peaceful religion. First, Muslims cannot pre-emptively initiate a war. They are only allowed to act in defense. Muslims have permission from Allah to fight back only when they are expelled from their houses or lands. War can be waged if there is a situation where defenseless people are under attack and ask their Muslim allies for help. The last reason for a just war is when war breaks out between two groups of believers and one party does not intend to stop it in spite of a proposed truce. Even for battles and fights, the Quran has set limitations and frameworks. If the enemy proposes peace, Muslims should immediately stop the war. Second, Muslims are not allowed to transgress the divine justice: “fight for the cause of God, those who fight you, but do not transgress, for God does not love the transgressors.” I believe that’s enough to realize that Islam is a religion of peace. We can see now in our society that there are some Muslim people who get married with Christian ones, did they kill them? Of course no. We see that there are people who welcome others from other religions in their homes, do they hurt them? Of course no. We see that there are Muslims who have friends from other countries and religions, what happened to them? Nothing, they’re still alive. Islam has plethora of values, and everything related to terrorism is illicit so, stop saying that Islam is the religion of terrorism. All in all, good feats change other’s inaccurate outlooks.
Salma Malki says: Good deeds change people’s attitude. Actually, they help to reform our ideas about something or someone. And as muslims , we must show our religious on good way to clear up the misconception that mainstream media express it on Islam, so this is why the new muslims generation try include themselves. For instance, Muslims NGOs who are working with non-Muslims to provide a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. Moreover, they start be an example of helping , sharing and caring like Rami Nashashibi who worths to inspire from him. In brief, good acts is the only and foremost technique to build a society full of kidness and respect.
Thank you dear Salma: Big effort.
Your essay is just amazing. Please, consider the few mistakes:
1- religious : religious is an adj. You should have a noun.
2- muslims generation: Muslim generation. the Adj. does not take “s”.
In brief, bravo. Very good work.
Hala says: Good deeds can completely change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, kindness and compassion can impact people positively. As we all know, mass media influences individuals within the society, which has grown with the advance of technology. Thus, a flock of people are in daze and feed off everything that mass media has to offer and digest any information without any critical thinking. Equally important, our Islam religion has been misconceived and misjudged because of the mainstream media. Furthermore, Islam is portrayed in western media as a terrorist religion that encourages perpetrators of violence and disruption. Hence, many Muslim NGOs clear up this misconceive by showing compassion and solidarity which reflect the reality of our great religion. Moreover, those organizations not only bridge the cultural gaps but also inspire many people to take the initiative of good deeds. According to Ramy, IMAN is an NGO which models an integrative approach that employs holistic interventions to provide a wealthy life for marginalized people who are living under the throes of grinding poverty. The organization provides many necessities, such us: health care, job opportunities, housing and supports arts and culture… for the different religions. But most important, IMAN plays a crucial role in clearing up the wrong image given to our religion. Last but not least, those organizations spawn compassionate societies full of tolerance and break down antagonism and misapprehend. In brief, good deeds not only change people’s perspectives but also change the world.
Excellent essay. I hope your friends will read it and learn form it.
One comment: you need to state the reference.
azhar arbouch says: good deeds change people’s perspectives.
In point of fact, they can bridge the cultural gaps. Also, they reflect the good image of humans, and therefore, their cultures and religions. So, as Muslims, we should correct the misjudgment and the misconception of Islam. However, we must provide the perfect example of this magnificent religion with its reals skills: including tolerance, collaboration, respect …And abolish all misapprehend about it, by volunteering, donating, and behaving decently and Peacefully.
Concerning this, the best example to give is the organization iman: it’s an organization runs by Rami NASHASHIBI, a Muslim, in Chicago U.S. it tools up all the types of equipment: including, healthcare, healthy food, housing policy, and job opportunities for needy people, living a miserable experience or grinding poverty. Besides, Rami is collaborating with Christians, Jews… What indicates the huge tolerance and cooperation in Muslims’ skills.
In brief, smalls actions can clear up a big misguide.
Excellent essay. Much better than what you wrote last time. A small example: abolish all misapprehend about it ( misapprehension)
You need a noun.
All the best.
Othmane nougaoui says: Good deeds change our prespectives . In point of fact , it has the power to change our way of thinking and humanity , in other words , they give us the hope to show to the world the really face and the good image of our religion who has been smeared by the terrorists since few years . For instance , the best example is Muslims NGOs who are working together with non-Muslims; they are a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures . In addition to that , I think with good deeds it will have low misjudgment to our religion , and It’s the goal of rami’s NGO (IMAM) who are trying to clear up the misjudgment about our religion
All in all , good deeds is a way to change our point of view and way of thinking . As quote goes ” How far that little candle throws his beams! So shines a good deed in a weary world”
Excllent Mr. Othmane. It is your best essay ever: very good organization, very good use of arguments.
On remark: please the quote in the CS sould be in the SSTS.
Best,
Akram abddaimi says: It is undeniable that good deeds can change people’s perspective.Infact,it has the power to bridge the cultural gap.nowadays,muslims are trying their very best to show the world their true positive side.Since our religion is about peace and good deeds,we always try to get rid of the bad impression we got from the mass media.the best example is IMAN,its a muslim organization led by Rami nashashibi.he is a muslim who made this organization to help the people in need,supply them with food and take care of their health no matter the religion and ethnicities.Rami tries to bridge the cultural gap and get rid of the bad image Islam got from the mass media.to conclude,it is very important do do good deeds,because it is the only way to change poeple’s opinion,and to show people the good side of Islam
Very good Akram. Great paragraph. Great organization. Please, consider the following mistake: no matter the religion and ethnicities. —– regardless of the religion and ethnicity.
Bravo 🙂
Youssef Gharafi says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives.In point of fact,It is the best way to overcome the misapprehend between countries and especially religions.
For instance,Rami is not just a muslim,but also a great community leader.He has created an organization called “IMAN”.This NGO provides a good example of co-operation and tolerance as It includes people from different countries and religions.Moreover,It helps many sectors as health care,organizing&advocacy(food ecosystems-leadership development…),green re-entry(training-housing…) and also arts&culture.
To conclude,good deeds are the pillars to avoid becoming a divided and divisive society.
Thank you Youssef; This paragraph is much better the one you wrote last time: better organization and good use of arguments. But please, try to have longer paragraphs.
One mistake: misapprehend – misapprehension. ( You need a noun)
Asmae Et-taleby says: Good deeds are a kind of reward that God gives to everyone who does great acts. In point of fact, most Muslim people try to get them in order to go to heaven. the majority think that non-muslim don’t get those good deeds and that’s a big mistake. But the IMAN association proves that all religions can work together and make the world better.
The organization forms an integrative approach that uses holistic interventions to address a range of structural and systemic injustices, integrating primary, behavioral and oral health; artistic expression; leadership development; organization and advocacy; housing; and vocational training, with the aim of significantly improving the quality of life for residents of marginalized communities. And all started in 1997 and grown in 2016.
Some years ago, Muslims were racist to other religions, moreover, they waked up and knew what they did and start fixing their mistakes.
Non-muslim also treated Muslims as terrorists and still they still do it. Completing this makes them more than terrorists. Good deeds make a normal human feel like a hero by making others happy.
Finally, we lose nothing by doing good deeds and it can even make our personality better.
Thank you Asmae for you super great effort. A big leap forward.
Please, consider the following remark:
Your Supporting of STS is very long and you did not mention the reference.
Good deeds can change people’s perspectives and bring untold amounts of happiness.Every good deed is more than welcomed nowadays.It can mean a world to someone, to you as well.Each of us should do something good, if we have a chance.If nothing else, we can always encourage and motivate other people to do good things.
As a matter of fact, people in need are just behind the corner, everywhere you turn to.Even though many of them do not ask for help, I’m sure they would be more than grateful if somebody, just for a second, paid attention to their problems or even better, solved them.Helping others and showing empathy is basic human nature.Doing an act of kindness feels wonderful for both, the person doing it and the person on the receiving end.Even a small gesture can show a person that they are valued and appreciated.
Besides, giving also connects us to others, creating stronger communities and helping to build a happier society for everyone.And it’s not all about money, we can also give our time, ideas, energy and love…In addition to this, helping others does not depend on their religion, nationnality, color… Doing good with people is one of the pillars of Islam.Let’s take the example of Sami a muslim living in Chicago, who created an association to help needy people.
In brief, good deeds can change our way of living.As the quote goes:” Let your good deeds be like rain.Drop a little everywhere”.
Very good paragraph dear Mesae. This is a bright work. But please, consider the following remarks:
a- state your reference.
b- The quote could have been better if you have written it in the SSTS
Sadiki Wissal says: Good deeds can absolutely change people’s perspectives . In point of fact , a simple act , no matter how it might appear (small or big ) lead you to a world full of trust , fraternity and love . Whereas mountain of strong worlds can mislead us . Yet, people tend to prejudge others on the basis of their race , language , nationality , color , social status or religion . This is certainly neither fair nor reasonable . In other words , the universe is too vast to let all the people belong to the same race or speaking the same language . The difference is necessary , but there is something common between all of us , whatever our history is , our geography , our culture . It is the human nature . We all belong to the human race. In addition to this , Islam , real Islam is not a religion of war and bloodshed as a number of people think and claim . Who thinks so , is definitely wrong . The truth is clear from our prophet and his wonderful acts . And I am so glad when I see that there still have persons who try to show the basis picture of Islam , that is a peaceful one . And Rami Nashashibi is one of those persons . His aim is noble and charitable . It is more about helping people in need by providing fresh food , health care and even job opportunities , in order to promote peace and blessing and draw smiles in such miserable faces . As Lewis said : “You can’t go back and change the beginning but you can start where you are and change the ending by kindness “All in all , a good deed brightens a dark world and may change people’s mind .
Good deeds change people attitude .In fact, it almost every religion and culture values and rewards the performance of good deeds .Nevertheless people misapprehend Islam that’s why muslims should try to give the best image to inspire others to change their perspective about Islam and the best example is IMAN a community organization that fosters health wellness and healing by organizing for social change IMAN work with non-Muslims and have a lot of branches; health center,green reentry and many other and the benefit of doing a good deed is when you perform a good deed, there is a possibility that someone may have seen you, or may have been told about your good deed. You develop a reputation as a good moral person by this way Muslims can give good reputation and include themselves from other Muslims that try to give bad image to the society about Islam . Sometimes some of your other flaws are wiped out by the good deeds that you perform as the quote goes big word seldom accompany good deeds.
Great effort Souka. Three things to consider:
1- The concluding sentence
2- State the reference
3- Please avoid sentences like: when you perform a good deed, there is a possibility that someone may have seen you, or may have been told about your good deed. Please, after completing a sentence, use a FULL STOP.
4- When writing, think about the reader who is not watching you.He has to understand it thanks to the linking words and punctuation.
All in all, very good.
Aya Souidi says: Good deeds change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, the manifestation of discrimination and intolerence toward muslims has grown from magnitude of things such as terrorist attacks. In other words, our religion is misjuged by people because of some western media that portray muslims as perpetrators of violence and disruption. Therfore, we must clear up the misconseption spread by the mainstream media. Furthermore, it is crucial to bridge the cultural gapes. Equally important, the images of Muslim NGOs working together with non-Muslims provide a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. Rami’s organisation is the best example. IMAN community health center provides comprehensive, accessible and culturally-competent health care to its diverse patient population. (IMAN). In breif, gratitude is one of the most powerful human emotions that broadens our attitude.
Very good work. I see you have made a huge leap ahead. Bravo.
( a spelling mistake: in brief)
Abdellah ELouazzani says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact, mainstream media give a rise to misjudgment and misconception to tear-down the image of Islam in the world. Nevertheless, Muslims are trying to clear up the difference misapprehends, so they make a gallant effort to enlighten the truth of Islam and Muslims. In addition to this, according to THE INNER-CITY MUSLIM ACTION NETWORK (IMAN), which is an Islamic community organization for donating and offering jobs. One section of this community is for medical health care, “we believe that quality health care is basic human right.” IMAN. Another section called GREEN REENTRY , for architecture and design ,”- Green ReEntry- provides transitional housing, life skills education, and sustainable construction training for returning citizens and high-risk youth.” IMAN. What is important is that these kinds of communities are using a practical solutions to show the Islam in the right way. In brief, good deeds are the key of correcting people’s attitude.
Great work dear Abdellah.
Very good organization. Very good use of the vocabulary and argument. Please, state the reference of the quote.
Aya Quassaoui says: Good deeds can effectively change people’s perspectives . In point of fact , they have the power to completly change the way a person perceives another . Moreover , whilst doing good deeds ,you are not only helping other people , but you are also upgrading yourself , somehow ,to a better version of YOU . In other words , by doing so , you will let people feel comfortable in their skin around you , and gaining their trust will be literally as easy as a piece of a cake . Since we are Muslims , good deeds are definetly part of our religion , but that might not be the only reason why Muslims should try to help other people , and raise a bright smile on their faces . The other convincing reason should be clearing up all the misdjudgement and “hate” non-muslims have towards us . It all started when the main stream media began to ruin the Muslims’ reputation , and give rise to all the misapprehension we are living in now , claiming that all Muslims are TERRORISTS , and that their religion is all about war and hatred . Consequently ,Muslims must try to correct all of what the mass media caused , and prove to everyone that they are harmless and peaceful . And the ideal example i can mention is Rami Nashashibi . He’s is a Muslim living in the U.S , and who runs a non-profit association called IMAN . It provides people from different backgrounds with what every each one of them requires , basically with the life necessities , such as : fresh and healthy food , housing , health supervision …… and also job opportunities for perpetrators who spent half of their whole entire life in jail , and who are striving for a brighter and happier life . In a nutshell , the best way to switch someone’s mindset is by doing good deeds.
One of the greatest essays you have written. Keep it up up up.
Please consider the following comments:
1- Avoid writing all the word in CAPS: it means screaming.
2- I think the concluding sentence is messing.
3- Please, state the reference.
Hoda Bourhida says: Deeds can change people’s standpoint. In point of fact, we can upgrade or sling mud at somebody by acts. Otherwise speaking, the only able thing to change people’s vision is our efficiency. As a Muslim, I believe that it’s our obligation to embellish the image of our religion and our reputation. Besides, we must stand by each other, in order to enlighten brains and dust the misapprehend. Moreover, it’s our duty to clear up what the perpetrators have committed and disrupt the trash-talk of social media by our performance. The best example is the Muslims NGOs who are working together with non-Muslims; they are a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. In brief, the foremost avenue in order to eliminate the idea of terrorism and build a coherent society is good deeds.
Mohammed Elguerrouj says: Good deeds can change people’s perspective. In fact, because of misjudgment, many people are trying to do good deeds in order to change their image. For example, Iman Chicago (Inner-City Muslim Action Network) is trying to save Muslim’s image. They are helping the needy in many fields. In healthcare, Iman is helping the poor to have good health. They believe that quality health care is a basic human right. In addition to that, according to Iman’s website, They have helped to lead the distribution of over 3,500 care packages to families and individuals from across their communities in Englewood, Chicago Lawn, beyond struggling with anxiety, isolation and fear in this COVID-19 moment. However, by doing this, many Christian are involved in this work. They have changed their mind about Muslims, start collaborating and helping them. To conclude, good deeds have the power to change everything in the world.
Excellent dear Mohamed. great evolution. Keep it UP.
Please, consider adding the reference.
Mohammed Bakri says: Good deeds can change people’s way of thinking about countries and religions . In fact , if a person change his way of thinking, he will also change the vision of his group . For exemple, Rami, who’s not only a mmuslim, but also a warrior, who only care about the vision that non-muslim, give to muslims . However, not all the world can trust muslims, due to terrorists or facts that” Fake Muslims” made. To deduce, good deeds is the key to have a clean vision about someone or something .
Dear Mohamed, I expect longer and better paragraph. You need more argument analysis and more details. Please, consider the punctuation : there is no comma before a linking word when it is in the middle of a sentence: not all the world can trust muslims, due to terrorists
Spelling: example.
Good deeds can change people’s prespectives. In poitn of fact, almost every religion rewards the performance of good deeds. It is a way to get closer to God and a way to enter heaven. Nowadays, muslims are trying to get rid of the bad impression they get by doing these kind of acts. One of the best exemples is Rami, the creator of Community Health Center called “IMAN”,which involves people from different countries and religions who take actions and do not hesitate to lend a helping hand for others whoever they are.All in all, good deeds can change the world and build a strong community.
Very good paragraph dear Abir. Please, consider the length. Be brave to express more yourself.
Yasmine kaddani says: Good deeds can change people’s perspective . In point of fact ,she is very powerful , and that’s why every religion and culture rewards the performance of good deeds.In order words, we can give an example as sami nashashibi who is a community server and his work with iman have been featured in many international and national média. In addition to this, doing good deed it warms your own heart and makes you feel good , it gives you a new perspective and keeps you from focusing on your own problems. Last but not least ,good deeds from good intentions flow; but good intentions only; build for us a place below.
Please, just focus. Yasmine you need to focus and try not to follow words. Follow ideas.
1- who is she in: she is very powerful?
2- In order words: in other words.
Your paragraph needs to be more convincing. Best luck.
sky younes says: good deeds change people perspective . in point of fact, to bridge the culture graps we must not misjudgeother religions and cultures.
in other words , the missjugement give rise to misguide our futur generations and creat wars between them . In addition to this ,we must coexiste with everyone to creat a community based on peace and love. as an example the community IMANE that gives the opportunity to everyone to benifite from it’s education systeme ,health systeme etc… Moreover , we must colaborate between the cultures to do someinitiative in order to foster and to reinforcethe bridge between the religions . All in all , good deeeds change people’s mind .
Youness, I think you did not check it before submitting. I see a lot of “silly mistakes”: in point of fact, ( After full stop, you a capital letter)
Examine this sentence: “we must colaborate between the cultures to do someinitiative in order to foster and to reinforcethe bridge between the religions”. It does not make sense and many words are stuck.
Please, correct it.
Diyae says: It’s irrefutable that muslims have the power to change the world’s perspective by their good deeds. In fact, muslims were an example to the world by what they have been showing of good and collaborative works. However, we must give to our religion a good image to inspire others, by helping and sharing and that’s what our god commanded us to do. The best example is the Muslims NGOs who are working together with non-Muslims ,they are a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. To reduce do what’s good for your community and you will see the good results in the future.
Thank you Diyae. Well done dear friend. But please, consider:
1- word choice: To reduce, … I think it does not make sense.
2- Please, state the reference.
3- Please, try develop more your ideas. Express more yourself.
Abdellah Boubker says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In fact ,good deeds are very powerful, they can have a huge impact on othrers mindset .Nevertheless, many people think that Islam is a religion of terrorism ,this is due to those that dirty our image as much as muslims. So our duty is to demonstrate that Islam is not that . We must show the real picture . How ? By doing good deeds. The best example is muslim NGO’s that are working together with non-muslims . It provides a great example of tolerance and fraternity. To conclude , good behaviors have the ability to change the world.
Dear Ssi Abdellah, this paragraph has nothing to do with other one: Very good organization. Few punctuation mistakes ( please, after finishing an idea, use full stop)
Also, please develop more your ideas: express yourself more.
Best,
Zainab Merhrioui says: Good deeds can change people’s perspective. In fact, People cause misconceptions, they misjudge other cultures and religions. If you show them the good in you, you can totally change their point of view and their opinion about you. We can take Islam as an example. Many mainstream medias show that our religion presents terrorism and violence, they convince people that the Islam is all about war and animosity. We can change that, all we need to do is to show our good deeds and that the Islam is full of happiness and love. Rami Nashashibi is a perfect example, He is a Muslim who lives in the USA, He runs a non-profit association called IMAN where he involves people from different backgrounds to lend a helping hand for others. In other words, helping others can also bring a better connection between people in the world. You also have the opportunity to show that you’re worth it. It can bring untold amount of happiness. When you perform acts of kindness, it doesn’t just help others but it’s good for you too. It makes you feel better. In brief, helping others can not only change someone’s opinion but it can also make the world a better place.
Bravo Zainab. Super paragraph. Very good fluency of ideas and accuracy.
Please media is plural. It does not take ‘s’.
Badr icherrouten says: It’s incontestable that muslims have the power to change the world’s perspective by their good deeds. In fact, some people say that muslims are terorists but the answer is no because muslims have been showing some colaborative works who impresses the world However, we must give to our religion a good image to inspire others, by helping and sharing and that’s what our god commanded us to do. The best example is the Muslims NGOs who are working together with non-Muslims ,they are a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths and cultures. To reduce do what’s good for your community and you will see the good results in the future.
Much better work dear Badr. Please, consider the difference between who and which: colaborative works who impresses . We say “which”.
I see the word: reduce.what does it mean? I think you want to say to conclude.
Amina El hebil says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In point of fact , when acting and helping others, people will definitely be fascinated and impressed by your deeds. In other words, helping is not about islamic religion, yet it is a human right for every religion and lighten the image for islam. For instance, Rami is one of the muslim leaders that devotes streneous efforts in order to enlarge his association, called”imane”, which is dedicated for helping others:
providing decent jobs, access to health care, engaging the artistic activities in order to enrich their skills.
Thereby, Rami is benefiting from volunteering works:
Helping others: as an example, a homeless person has food to eat, thanks to the kindness and generosity of the volunteer.
Help yourself :Besides helping someone, doing a good deed warms your own heart and makes you feel good, but also, go to heaven. In nutshell, as the quote goes: “Let your good deeds like rain✨”
Thank you dear Amina. Well tried. But it is not your best. It lack arguments to convince your reader. It targets the feeling, not the mind.
Niama Talbi says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In fact, Muslims nowadays should clear up the misconceptions that the mainstream media misapprehend about us, and resort to kindness, solidarity and co-operation to change those prejudgment. To illustrate, Rami Nashashibi a community organizer propelled by faith, the Executive Director of the Inner-City Muslim Action Network (IMAN), a nonprofit community organization that deals with city issues ranging from food ,justice to affordable housing, arts and medical care for all ages and conditions. Furthermore the IMAN Community Health Center manifests this belief with a mission of providing comprehensive, accessible and culturally-competent health care to its diverse patient population across the inner-city. Moreover the Green ReEntry program provides members with job training skills in construction, they learn everything from HVAC to electrical to carpentry, and then they put those skills to use by rebuilding homes in Chicago and restoring peace in their communities . Also the image of muslims NGOs working together with non- muslims provide a good example of co-operation and tolerance between different faiths ,and correct the portray that we are perpetrators of violence and disruption and clear up those stereotypes and prejudices about our religion without wating to be rewarded .In other word good deeds must be done with intention , not for attention .To conclude good deeds has super power to change people’s prospects.
Excellent dear Niama. Very good organization and very good use of arguments. Keep this level. You are going UP
Amina og says: Good deeds change our perspectives. In fact, islam is known for its tolerance and peace , Nevertheless, mainstream media lead to misguidnance to mess up our image for others . They let people think that islam is a religion that encourage for violence . Nowadays muslims are trying to clear up this misjugment by changing their behavior. Their imposing themselves by working toghether without caring about people’s religion to serve tolerance beetwen diffrent religions.
we can take “ISLAM “ as an example ,” ISLAM”is an organizaton its maanager is a musliim , it provides: healthcare, healthy food, housing policy and jobs opportunities to needy people , without any discrimination beetwen people no matter how they are . To conclude, coming togheter is beginning, keeping toghether is progress; working toghether is success .
Thank you for your Come Back. Bravo Amina. Please, consider few remarks:
– islam is a religion that encourageS for violence.
– Please, Islam – Muslim should take a capital letter.
– Please, avoid speaking when you write.
I am sure the coming will be better than this essay, which is quite good.
Best
Chaymae Messaoudi says: Good deeds can change perfectly peoples’ perspective. As a matter of fact, good deeds might seem invisible, but they leave a trail that is imprinted on the hearts of others. Furthermore, there are many benefits of doing it. Above all, you are helping someone who is maybe homeless or poor… Thanks to your act of kindness , this person has gotten help to live normally. Moreover, if you do a good deed for others, you will end up healing yourself too and feeling satisfied. In addition to this, it will influence the society to do the same kind of act you are doing or why not better ? However, Muslims are destroying the image of Islam but some of them are working passionatly with non-muslims by providing a good example of collaboration and tolerance between faiths and cultures. As they say: “Good deeds brightens a dark world”. Also, it clears up the reputation that the real Muslims are trying to achieve. For instance, a Muslim American named Rami, who is a community organizer and a leader in an organization known as the inner-city that works for health, wellness and healing. Most notably, Green ReEntry is a program who works directly with returning citizens, for many whom are coming home after a long prison sentence… Green ReEntry provides training offers, safe transitional housing and a weekend program to spread joy and beatitude on their hearts.To conclude, good deeds should be done with intention, not for attention.
Dear Chaymae, we have missed your great essays. This one is one of the greatest. Thank you for your effort. Bravo.
Bayane Bouziane. says: Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. No matter how small or big they are, they have significant impacts on people, whether positive or negative. In addition to this, gentle acts clear up misconceptions and misjudgments, and correct misguidance. Nevertheless, they won’t be able to change each person’s aspect because each one looks at those actions from a different angle. Added to this, we shouldn’t do noble deeds to seek attention but to reach intention. As a quote goes: “A good deed brightens a dark world.” The best example that enhances this quote is the IMAN association run by Rami Nashashibi. This organization bridges cultural gaps by assisting marginalized communities. It includes a health center, green Reentry, organizing, and advocacy center, as well as an artistic and cultural club. It focuses on reaching social justice and on providing wellness to every suffering human. It has given chances to mistreated victims to flourish and to build a new life. In other words, it has brightened many desperate, gloomy lives. Furthermore, it proves that all the misconceptions that scattered to destroy Islam and many other religions, to show that criminals will never change are wrong. Also, these good deeds are saving people from misguidance by enriching their hearts and souls to become better people. In brief, righteous acts can change people’s prospects.
Good deeds can change people’s perspectives. In fact , people radiate the good behaviors to happiness and peacefully . This means their emphatize and kindness with others propagates across their social networks , which motivates them and lot of people to pursue on doing positive actions and improving the qualities of a real citizens . Helping others is not only good and beneficial for them and a good to do , It also makes us happier and pround of our skills . Add to that , It helps the creating of the coexistence between people from different social classes and creating new relationships , In order to form a strong society based on helping , peace and love . We take Rami experience as a very good example , who creates an association to give job chances and to create the interaction between the Afro-Americans and Muslims . So , we should take the inspiration from Rami who makes a very good deeds . All in all , if we have the ability to do a good deeds , without hesitating we should do it , because It contributes lot in the construction of a society .
Bravo dear super Reda. Great revolution. Proud of your effort!
Please, very few mistakes: when the linking words are in the middle of the sentence, no comma is used.Also, avoid very long sentences. They need more effort to keep them clear ‘( we say accurate) and sometimes, the sentence will look as it is spoken.
barae fethi says: Good deeds can change people’s perspective. First, performing random acts of kindness makes you an example of what is possible. You become an inspiration, opening the awareness of others to their own potential. Most of us want our lives to inspire love in others. So for instance, when children witness their parents doing good in the world, they are taught gratitude, compassion, love and unity. Generations of individuals can learn from this that happiness is a choice, but you have to be open to it and take action to help spread it around. The world is evolving in such a way that requires each of us to take responsibility to create and grow positive energy any way we can. We are transforming the old ways into newer, lighter, more loving ways of being and living. The most important thing is to send our love out into the world no matter what form it takes. In addition to this, Saint Basil once said: A tree is known by its fruit, a man by his deeds. A good deed is never lost, he who sows courtesy reaps friendship, and he who plants kindness gathers love. In the movie, good deeds, wesley meets someone from outside his socioeconomic level, and gets a whole new perspective in life. When we help others, we get to know how people from different walks of life live. As result, our worldview changes, and our perspective changes as well. Moreover, “Authentic values are those by which a life can be lived, which can form a people that produces great deeds and thoughts.” I read in an article a story of a young boy who came up with the idea to help three people without accepting anything in return. He would ask the recipient to pay the favor forward to three other people. These three people, in turn, would also help three other people and ask them to pay it forward. When groups of people help each other, it is bound to help society as a whole. So imagine how much faster our society will improve if people helped each other instead of looting and looking out for their own self interest. Finally and most importantly, I believe that when we do something on behalf of another, we can think of ourselves as being half of it. That means we do not sacrifice or hurt ourselves to help another. It means we become part of the help and receive help in the process. An elevation takes place in your vibration and in your spirit when you think of how you are able to contribute to another person’s well-being. To conclude, I think that a good deed brightens a dark world.
Super excellent paragraph. No comment. I hope your classmates can read and learn from it. But one mistake: reference, where did you get the data from? We must state it.
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