Hello leaders,
This weekend, you have to comment on your friends, from B1a and A2c juniors classes.
1- Evaluate their use of the vocabulary
2- Evaluate their punctuation and the use of the linking words
3- Comment on their creativity.
4- Write your name when you finish.
5- Comment on JUST 2 students’ essays.
PLEASE? DO NOT GRADE.
The link is: http://www.okecenter.com/index.php/2019/04/18/creative-writing-describing-and-adventure/
Go to MY SPACE. Then, Go to: A2 or A2 juniors
MOHAMMED AMRI says: Safae Oubouazza /Safae wrote agood paragraph but the ideas was arranged.
She didn’t respect punctuation very well . Also , she didn’t use the verbs in their tense, and Safae used a simple vocabulary comared to what they studied.
yassine bounoua
He wrote a good paragraph but the verbs was not in their rightense and some words was incorrect .Also , the punctuation was not good
yasmine el mejdoubi says: Mohammed Elguerrouj: He wrote a great paragraph, he respected the punctuation and the linking words were used very well, yet, the vocabulary used was regular and ordinary.
Ziyad Ghazi: He wrote a valuable paragraph, the punctuation was respected and the tenses of the verbs were respected. But, there was a lack of good vocabulary, also, some problems with the capital letters.
Marwa Tagrourti says: Rayane Fethi :
Rayane wrote a good essay,but I think he has problems with the simple past. And as I saw in the question,they were supposed to wrige 100 words. Yet, Rayane wrote a short essay.
Douae Haddouyat :
Douae’s paragraph was good,exept that she has a very big problem with ponctuation. Apart frot that, she used a good vocabulary.
Marwa Tagrourti says: Rayane Fethi :
Rayane wrote a good essay, but I think he has problems with simple past. And as I saw in the question, they were supposed to write 100 words. Yet, rayane wrote a short essay.
Douas Haddouyat:
Douae’s paragragh was good, except that she has a very big problems with the ponctuation. Apart from that, she used a good vocabulary.
Hajar mousalli says: Akram El Hadi: He wrote a good paragraphe.He actually respects the ponctuation ,but he has some spelling mistakes,like:touk.
Mohammed El guerrouj:He’s paragraphe was superbe, he used some new vocabolary, and also respects the ponctuation , and linking words.,
Noha chaib says: Hamza Nougaoui:
This student was so brief in his essay, while reading it I noticed lot of things, such as, the lack of new vocab, as good as he did not respect the verb’s tenses, and also he had a clear problem while using the linking words. But actually he did well while using the punctuation in his essay. (by the way hamza if you are reading this just Don t give uo and I am very sure that you can do more and much better than that).
For the second student I chose Mehdi Lhadef:
His essay was very good, he did an outstanding work, but he was somehow brief, he didn’t write a lot about the actions, and he didn’t use lot of new vocab, but actually the essay was very good and easy to understand. And as I noticed, he excelled at using the punctuation and the verb tenses, which made the essay really organised, I appreciate that.
wadie azimani says: nada dahmani: she wrote a good paragraphe, she actually respected the punctuation,however she has some small spelling mistakes like “cause” we say cause just in speaking but we can’t write it in a paragraphe .
aya ramdani: aya wrote an amazing paragraphe, she used a good vocabulary and respected the punctuation .
Katrenada Lembarki says: Hiba Edarraz, you wrote a good essay, but I think that you must add a comma (,) in the beginning of your essay and the capitalisation. Thank you.
Katrenada Lembarki says: Manal Abbadi, I loved her essay it was rich and a good one, she wrote it simply. But I think she used a lot of punctuation as commas and full stops.
Lina Oumharch =) says: Hi i shoose to comment on Nada Dehmani ‘s story.It was exellent but i just have some remarks to here to make it better next time.Firstly,we don’t saw some new acts different from the original adventure except eating a sandwich and it was a little boring ;it was just if we’re reading a summary of bear’s adventure.Secondly ,she ignores capitalization and linking words.however she has a good use of the vocabulary :usefule expressions and new words.All in all it was amazing and beautiful story but NADA should just know that she can do something best than this.
The second story that i wan to comment on is for Zaid Jalil.So ,it’s good for creativity ;that’s because he changed the actions and created new ones and we feel exited when reading it it was not boring,but he had some spelling mistakes such us :defficult,obligat… More than that he had some problemes with :punctuation and linking words.And the last remark that i have is that the story is too short but in general it’s exellent and amazing and never forget that you can do more.
Rayane Benabdellah says: The Super Mehdi has written a beautiful paragraph with good expression but I think it needs more training to become even more than the B1 students.
More trainings more expressions.
El Mazzouji lina says: I am going to give some advices to Roa kajout ,so, after reading her essay I would love if she corrects her spelling mistakes,(I followed the river ),she must work a little bit more on her vocabulary , use some new words that she learned and focus on punctuation. I advice her to be more creative and think out of the box.
I am also going to give some advices to Tasnim fakir, after reading her essay I would love if she conjugated the verbs correctly(must save not must saving…), and work on spelling mistakes (who are lost not who lost…) ,she must work on her punctuation because I saw just one point in the whole essay, she must use words that she learned. Finally, i advice her to be creative and do something original.
Mohammed Ali Elkhounchafi says: Aya Quassaoui : she wrote a good essay , she used beautiful expressions she do it simply but I think that if she used some details , It will be better .
Saad bouhamida: I loved his essay and his way of describing. He respected the punctuating but I think the main problem is some grammar mistakes so he need more training
Amimar Douae says: Meryem Alami said :
Hello ,my name is meryem .i vividly remenber when i was asked to save a tourist trapped in the amazon.first,i have room in my backpack for one more item. So when i jumped from the airplane into the river , my adventure was started . Firstly i have a choose to use my machete and my buchwack through the jungle or a cross the river.my final decision was following the river prompt it faster.in my road i found a big crocodiles.then i use the slingshot to to scare and hit hit them.Later,i feel hangry and need somz energy.hence ,i have two bad different option eat a grub or locusts. I indeed decies the locusts trigger it’s more energy but it’s disgusting. Finally, In near place,i reache the tourist who was alone and scared .my adventure is not easy because i sacrifite my life for helping the tourist
First I want to thank you for your great job you used some beautiful expression . However Ithink that you had a problem with capitalization and specialy with “I” .Also I think you had a luck of linking words .And i want just to correct a mistake that it could be deadly “a big crocodiles” is better to say “some big crocodiles ” .Finally thank you for your great job
Soukayna Ettaleby saids :
hi i am Soukaina ,i’m an adventurer.i was chosen to save some tourist stuck in a dangerous forest, “Amazon”, i don’t have choose so i decide to accepte the mission cause i’m an “adventurer” and it’s my work .First i toock my backpack and jump from the helicopter into the river, then i have to cross a very dangerous river full of predator ,and reptil ,i was very afraid to find these reptil, but i am on a mission, after five min of walking , I found a crocodile it was terrifying, he wanted to eat me but ,i started to throw stones on him, and then he left ,I went on my way i was hugry so i look for some fruits ,i find some raspberry i eat it and continue my way, i wase close to my destination i heard some voices caling for help , i run very fast to get them back .
first of all thank you for your job it was amazing .I thing you had the same problem of Meryem capitalization and linkin words .However it was a great job , and never forget practice make difference
Hanan ahdaj says: Well,i choose to comment on Asmae Et talbi’s story honestly she wrote a very good essay , she used simple expressions also she respected the ponctuation ,and the verbs were on their right tense. I loved the way she writes her essays, to guve her some advice : just keep going like this.
Saddik Nizar says: Zakaria Heyouni: I congratulate you for your great efforts, it was a good paragraph. But i advice you to reduce from making spelling mistakes ( i fond), punctuation, and also you must learn how to use tenses in different situations.
Roumaissae melhaoui says: First of all I want to thank zakaria heyouni for his efforts and he wrote a good paragraph . Well ,my advice for you is to pay attention not only to the spelling mistakes but also to the punctuation and you must learn how to use the tenses in the right place but in general it was good.
Keep going !
Aymane Kaddar says: Aya Ramdani did an overall good job of writing her essay. The only small problem is that she has few punctuation mistake, but those do not take that much time to master if you practised well.
Ismail El Figuigui also did a good job writing his essay. But he could’ve got a tiny bit of details added so that it sounds like a story.
Akram abddaimi says: Lina bouras.her paragraphe is good in term of content,but the problem is that she did a lot of grammar and writing mistakes,and i think that she used the ponctuation just 2 or 3 times.so sher must work very hard for writing good paragraph
Zakariya serraji says: Ismail elfiguigui wrote a good paragraph but I saw that you mixed past simple with present simple so revise your grammar and other thing, you didn’t use the linking words.
Zakariya serraji says: mehdi jellouli wrote a great essay with new vocabulary. In addition to this, he used the linking words,the punctuation but I saw a very small mistake that sometimes he put the commas in the wrong area .
Maryem Abbadi says: Lina bourass: she didn’t respect the ponctuation she doesn’t know when to use the the comma and when to use the point, and concerning the vocabulary she made too much mistakes but at least she tried to sho off her best
Amina ghorafi says: O choose Lina bouras and the super Mehdi they did good job but they did some mistakes the ponctuation is used , they use simple vocabulary . In general they did good job
Ahmed jaafari says: I choose the super mehdi because he wrote a very good story, but they some few mistakes that he did, he miss some punctuation, and also he didn’t use new vocabulary he uses just simple words , but in general he made a very good work.
OMARTSOULI says: Of course I choose super Mahdi he rows the best story,but there are some few mistakes,some punctuation problems and also he used just few newly studied vocabulary,in general he made a good work.
Younes tsouli says: For sure my decision is the paragraph of SUPER MAHDI us my bro said. In my opinion it was the best summary that I read . So, he uses a very simple words , whith out spelling mistakes. In addition to this , he respects the punctuation.
In the end he mades a good story
ACHRAF HAMID says: I choose the super mehdi because wrote an amazing story ,but there are few mistakes,problems of punctuation and also he didn’t use newly vocabulary. In general he did a very good work.
ABIR CHEBABI says: Aya Ramdani wrote a great essay and the super mehdi did too. They had few mistakes but it was good. They need a bit more oractice and it will be perfect.
zayneb ibrahimi says: Safae Oubouazza says:
I am safae,i am a adventer i must save same turiste in te remote jungles i had room in my back pack for one more item.i trapped in one of the wildest and most dangerous.jungles in the whole world.I jumped from the air plane to start my adventure bisides,folloued the river because it is faster.but,I was in lucky,i com a cross a crocodil and i decided to hit it Arth slingshot.
The beautiful safae wrote a very good paragraphe it was a little bit small and didin’t have a lot of good vocabulary while she is a very gentel student , and she even did not spoke step by step .
Morever she had some spelling mistakes like turiste and even folloued .
All in all I really liked her story I wish she will write bigger .
Mejdoubi Raïd says: Mehdi:he had a few problems with the grammar mistakes and also the ponctuation,he uses a very simple way in the words and even the style.Mostly,it was good. In my opinion,he deploy his effort to have another succes
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